It’s human nature to be selfish. We care about ourselves first and foremost.
And, since hiring managers (the ones I’ve met, anyway) are human, they care more about themselves and their problems than about you and yours.
With that in mind, you should know that approximately 98% of the cover letters I read could be instantly improved by making one, simple change: Turn all the mentions of “I, me, mine” into “you, You, YOU.”
Example — don’t write this: “I’m applying for a job where my skills will be rewarded with the opportunity for advancement …”
Peh.
Write something like this: “You will benefit from my 11 years of experience, which will help me make a rapid contribution for you.”
For validation, we turn to the world of classical advertising, back when ads used to be written by salesmen (as opposed to today, when ads are almost universally written by “creative,” funny people … who couldn’t sell cheeseburgers to Michael Moore).
Worth recounting is the story of Max Hart (of Hart, Schaffner and Marx) and his advertising manager, the late and great George L. Dyer. They were arguing about long copy. To clinch the argument Mr. Dyer said, “I’ll bet you $10 I can write a newspaper page of solid types and you’d read every word of it.” Mr. Hart scoffed at the idea. “I don’t have to write a line of it to prove my point,” Mr. Dyer responded. “I’ll only tell you the headline: “This page is all about Max Hart!”
Did you get that?
To test whether your cover letter is any good, ask yourself, “Is this about me, or the reader?” If the reader thinks, “Hey, this is all about me!” you’ve got their attention, and most likely, a job interview, too.
If not, you don’t.
While this advice applies specifically to the cover letters you write and send, it should also shape every contact you make with employers. If you can convince them that you’re “all about them,” they will be happy to listen to whatever you say … and the job offers will follow.
Because your competition will still be sending cover letters chock full o’ crap like, “My skills include, but are not limited to …”
But not you, right?